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Fic: Untitled drabble (LoM)

Posted on 2011.03.14 at 19:15
Current Mood: productive
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Title: Untitled
Author: Bistokids
Words: Drabble (see notes)
Chapter: 1/? (see notes)
Pairing: See notes
Warnings: See notes

A/N: 1) This idea came to me in a dream, I have these dreams where I get indistinct colours and shapes changing form and I thought this would work well for Life on Mars. I’m not entirely satisfied with how it came out, but I’ve played with it and played with it, and in the end I decided to just go for it! lol (Sorry about the title, I’m rubbish at thinking of good titles.)
2) I suppose technically it’s not exactly a drabble, coming in at 151 words or thereabouts, but hopefully it’s close enough.
3) The pairing is Sam and Gene, obviously, but I’m not exactly sure what rating this would have. (See warnings).
4) (well, 3a) I suppose I should warn for language, but I don’t reckon it’s any worse than canon, although I don’t remember ‘love truncheon’ anywhere in the original! XD
5) (or 4) All feedback is lovely, as long as it’s positive, or constructive. I originally intended this as a standalone, but I’m sure Sam will be up for some retaliation, so who knows!
Crumbs, these notes have gotten away from me! On with the fic...

There was no form, just a wash of white, coalescing by degrees into a dim shape, tiny and distant at first but growing, darkening steadily, until it loomed, featureless but strangely reassuring.

“Bloody hell, Tyler,” the shape said. “You’ve not actually snuffed it?”

Sam tried to answer, to move, anything, but his higher functions appeared to have deserted him. He felt rough hands grab his shoulders.

“I’ll tell you now, Gladys, there’s no bloody way I’m explaining this to the plod. If you’ve gone and died on me, I’m dumping you in the canal.”

Sam hoped the feeble moan he managed to emit would be enough to convey his continued existence, and was reassured to hear an answering chuckle.

“Always knew me love truncheon was a thing of power, Sammy, but if I’d realised what a great girl you were I’d have gone easy on you.”

“Piss off,” Sam answered fondly.

Comments:


talkingtothesky
talkingtothesky at 2011-03-14 19:47 (UTC) (Link)
:DDDD You did it!
I, being poor, have only my dreams.
bistokids at 2011-03-14 22:14 (UTC) (Link)
I just can't help myself sometimes! XD
Loz
lozenger8 at 2011-03-14 22:57 (UTC) (Link)
I know that I, for one, am glad.
I, being poor, have only my dreams.
bistokids at 2011-03-14 23:19 (UTC) (Link)
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I, being poor, have only my dreams.
bistokids at 2011-03-14 22:16 (UTC) (Link)
The funniest thing was, when I was writing that about 'love truncheon' not being canon, I really had to think hard to be sure it wasn't! Ahh Gene.

Glad it made you laugh! :D
severinne at 2011-03-14 20:39 (UTC) (Link)
LOL, brilliant! The sensory blur and gruff dialogue was perfectly engrossing, and then when the reveal comes *cough* at the end, I just burst out laughing. Love it, thanks for sharing! :D
I, being poor, have only my dreams.
bistokids at 2011-03-14 22:33 (UTC) (Link)
Thanks, Sev. :D This was fun to write!
Loz
lozenger8 at 2011-03-14 22:56 (UTC) (Link)
I think the problem I have here is that this was actually worth the wait. This is brilliant. Also; OH, YOU!
I, being poor, have only my dreams.
bistokids at 2011-03-14 23:22 (UTC) (Link)
No, you! XD

Honestly, on the very few occasions I actually write something in this fandom these days, inspiration can pretty much always be traced directly back to either you or draycevixen. Or usually a combination of the pair of you!

So, um, thanks!

Edited at 2011-03-14 23:23 (UTC)
basaltgrrl
basaltgrrl at 2011-03-15 01:08 (UTC) (Link)
Awwww! Sam able to emit nothing but a feeble moan could mean any number of things... but the "love truncheon" leaves no doubt!
As someone who has read older fics of yours with great appreciation, I must say I'm happy to see this!
I, being poor, have only my dreams.
bistokids at 2011-03-15 01:51 (UTC) (Link)
And as someone who has been woefully inept at responding to comments of late, I'd like to say a blanket 'thank you and hope you'll forgive me! x

Strike while the irony is hot
draycevixen at 2011-03-15 01:38 (UTC) (Link)

1) I suggest Death by Love Truncheon... It has a certain ring.

*g*


I, being poor, have only my dreams.
bistokids at 2011-03-15 01:55 (UTC) (Link)
Awww, do you not think 'Untitled Drabble' hits the spot? XD (I actually wanted to slap myself for misuse of the term 'drabble', even given the circumstances. I'm such a damn geek sometimes.)

La Petite Mort Par Love Truncheon. *nods*
Strike while the irony is hot
draycevixen at 2011-03-15 01:57 (UTC) (Link)

I'm pretty geekily obstinate on the subject of drabbles myself. *g*

Great minds... I almost put it in French myself.
Dana
danae_b at 2016-03-29 05:48 (UTC) (Link)
LOVE TRUNCHEON

I should probably not have been drinking water when I read this XD SO DELIGHTFUL and clever and funny and it makes me so, so happy <3
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